Post 24: Why the revised is better

Reading my revised post:1 you can see that I have confidence in what I am writing compared to the original post. I quote, "I have fun hanging out with the people I care most about while making the physical and mental gains needed for my future debut as Dr. Pham the Physical Therapist" as I know what I actually want to do as my future career compared to post one where I was still clueless of what I wanted to do. Reading my non-revised post one it had an awkward tone when reading it compared to the revised one.

Comments

Post a Comment

Popular posts from this blog

Brian Pham Introduction

Welcome everyone! My name is Brian Pham and I am currently majoring in Health Sciences. My objective for this semester is to pass this class with flying colors and I hope everyone has somewhat a similar goal. I've started making changes to my work ethics so that I could be more consistent with doing my assignments on time and not cramming the night before. I'm looking forward to working with you all and let us finish this semester strong.
Read more

Post 10: Exercise

Exercise has been my passion and a healthy hobby that I have invested in for the past two years. I started the summer before my junior year started in high school. I had relatives come visit me and then talked me into trying some of the workouts they did and showing me how to properly do them for maximum results. I loss ten percent body fat the results I had were incredible. I kept working out and joined a weight lifting class to help me become stronger. For Christmas my parents got me a gym membership and from their on I learned more types of workouts from personal trainers and power lifters. As of today I still keep working out even with my busy schedule I try to find an open time to devote to the gym so I don't lose all the progress I have made over the past two years. I plan to keep exercising until my body can no longer function properly and to keep spreading fitness knowledge to others who plan on trying to workout.
Read more

Post 22: Peer Review

Peer review is has multiple aspects that are good and bad. You may have some classmates that can point out simple mistakes in your writing that you blindly skip over. This tends to happen a lot to me but thank goodness I messed up in front of my peers instead of my professor as points won't be deducted from my paper. On the bad side of things our peers don't have credentials backing them up like our professors do with their degrees so, sometimes people just ignore what peer review you tell them and don't bother fixing their own mistakes.
Read more